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雅思大作文7分范文及解析:大城市生活质量越变越糟

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  报告类大作文,环境类话题

  Today, the quality of life of people in big cities is getting worse. What are the causes of this problem? Any measures should be taken to solve it?

  题目来源:2013年5月11日亚太雅思大作文

  题目大意

  如今大城市生活质量越变越糟。提问:原因是什么?有没有解决方案?

  思路解析

  规划写作任务,论证过程分两大方面:

  1.导致城市生活问题的原因:

  高昂的生活成本如房价和物价导致了城市人民的的压力和焦虑

  未能很好处理的垃圾,工业排放,各种化石燃料的消耗和排放,都导致了生活环境恶化。

  2. 可以改善城市生活品质的措施:

  增加开阔的空间或者绿地供人们休闲可以改善和缓解人们的内心压抑。

  对碳排放量大的产业进行管控同时鼓励绿色出行并大力开发干净高效的能源。

  审题,找出关键词/限定词

  本题题目要求非常明确分析原因并给出解决方案,因此文章结构非常明确。

  题目话题也有点大,写作时容易想到很多信息而疏于梳理或者过度推导原因追根问底无穷无尽,所以笔者可以思考先梳理在进行归类。毕竟字数有限,文章不宜过于散乱。

  提纲

雅思大作文7分范文及解析:大城市生活质量越变越糟

  高分写作示范

  The characteristics of city life is often posited, closely related to ambient psychosocial stressors and physical environment hazards.  As cities have clearly played a major role in the creation of the decreasing level of life quality of the city dwellers, they will form a central part of any response.

  Big cities are associated with a high cost of living. Houses and apartments in prime neighbourhoods tend to be much smaller and much more expensive. Goods and services can also be more costly, in comparison with their rural counterpart. The cost of living is barely mediated by average salaries and public transportation, which will constantly put those dwellers under enormous pressure and anxiety at a disproportionately high rate.  Another grave problem of cities is the deterioration of the living environment.  It cannot be denied that air, water and land are severely polluted in a city. The main causes for this are lack of proper disposal of wastes, large number of industries lacking purification facilities, lack of proper sanitation, use of coal, petrol and diesel which cause extreme pollution, incomplete combustion of fuels and many more. And rising urban populations mean these problems may soon get a great deal worse.

  Yet evidences suggests that measures can be taken to make cities work better in terms of emissions and sustainability and make them work better as prosperous and attractive places to live and work as well.  For instance,an increase in blue space visibility and availability of green space to relax could help ease mental stress,shifting people from moderate distress into a lower category.  All cities can guide urban planning and prevent the expansion and lock in of high-carbon infrastructure or offer complementary measures on public transport, cycling, electric and shared vehicle infrastructure.  A transformation in the energy supply mix, together with a step-change in energy efficiency of technologies and change in energy consumption is also worth considering.

  In conclusion,it is undeniable that city life, per se, is placing the environment and individuals in peril. Fortunately, society is more aware and empowered to address these issues of urban health.

  相关词汇和语法结构

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  disproportionately

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  combustion

  complementary

 

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